Dark Dusk Dreams.. A Must Read :o?

[sexysilver]

I've posted the older versions of my novel's introduction before, but as the database was wiped squeaky clean and I got a special request, I shall re-post the prologue and a few paragraphs of the beginning Enjoy loves

***Aww, my lovely friends, just for carefulness, I have deleted the prologue. If anyone truly wishes to read it, just send me a pm

[Benladesh]

I haven't read Rockett in so long! This was an amazing peice. Still wants to make me read much more. I will buy the books when they come out. Your writting has improved a lot! I can tell. I used to always have little comments but now I have almost nothing to say. This stuff is just amazing. Keep up the good work Silvie. This writting is really a grabber. Once you start reading you don't want to stop. Of course i've read other parts which captivates me even more.

Only thing is that the name Fancyworder is awkward. Its straight to the fact yes but it sounds like a word a child would use and is awkward to say. If you like it keep it as it's not a big part. i just wanted to point that out

[sexysilver]

Haha, yeah as far as Fancyworder goes... when I don't know what to call something, I put in a jumbled capitalized phrase. Stef was reading it and really liked it even though I was like eh... so I kept it there. I'll probably change it

[seashell2_js]

I remember reading part of this a while ago. It sounds even better now, and the prologue and the rest of the story that you posted really draws me in.

Hm, when I think about it, "The lilting scrawl of his letter still burned in her mind" seems a little out of place. It does make me wonder what it means and keep on reading...but I guess I would have expected something more about it throughout the passage if it were mentioned in the first paragraph and sounded like something that was very prominent in her mind.

The rest of it is good though, and like Ben, I can't really see anything else that needs changing. I would love to read more.

[Dag]

I love the way you incorporate the supernatural into the scenery as if it is completely normal, it makes the idea of it very seamless, and the descriptions you give are clean and easy to understand.

Good start, I want to read more .

[sexysilver]

Thanks seashell, I might try to add another comment in there just so it's not mentioned only once. You'll find out later what that was. If y'all are real good I might post up more next week ;P

And yay Daggy-poo

[Forte]

A must read indeed <3 Wonderful as always Silvie my dear, hopefully you'll have more for me to read soon! Soory I didn't see this earlier ~

[oogabooga]

Amazing. The vivid detail in every last description and the plot captivates me. Not much else to say. Spectacular job, can't wait to read more.

[treeko]

i love it ^^ I think I told you that before