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watericesage Wrote:Krycsm - Answering only to the Master's touch
I like the different take on the subtext. I'm glad that you referred to the violin directly. Although, this doesn't fit with the theme, it is still a very good subtext. - 8.5/10

Do I ever fit with the theme? I tend to go with what thoughts the image evokes in my mind...and that's why I always get eliminated sooner or later. And GS...the whip comment scares me.

Good job everyone ^_^.



Round Note: The problem I had with most of the subtexts were that they didn't refer to the violin directly. As WIS said, the violin is the main focus here. Notice that the main text even says "the violin" ? Since the subtext would most likely go under it, the subtext should really describe the violin...

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Ryguy - With four simple strings...*fade*...your musical soul can sing
I like this a lot . It conveys a nice message and fits the mood of the signature. The only problem with it is that the second line is a little longer than the first, so rhythmicly it doesn't flow as well. Also, "musical soul" sounds a little awkward to me for some reason. - 8.5/10

Yoshi4007 - one note at a time
Refer to round notes. I'm not quite sure what you were referring to with this subtext (if you were referring to the notes in the background, there were many of them and they were hardly the main focus of the picture >_< ). More focus on the violin is needed. - 6/10

Pixalation - A serenade of strings
To soothe one's soul
Nice "S" sounds; they're soft and fit the dreamy mood of the signature. It's also very poetic and fitting to the signature. - 9/10

Lord_owlstar - The language of music *fade* is universal
Refer to round notes. This is a bit bland to me. The subtext feels too declarative and doesn't fit the dreamy feel of the signature. Also, the fade wasn't needed. - 6.5/10

Brett618 - 'simply symphonic
While symphonic was a nice word to use, simply is a little iffy. I think this would be more appropriate for a cute signature and not such a serious one as this one. Because of that, I also don't feel the apostrophe was needed here. Again, more reference to the actual violin is needed. - 6/10

Benladesh - A Melodic Blessing
Lovely ^_^. When I see the subtext I see it as "The violin - a melodic blessing". It describes the violin well and fits the mood of the signature. - 9/10

Jlt1990 - the notes of eternal happiness...
Refer to round notes. There are notes in the background, but since the main text is "The violin" and the subtext is "the notes etc.", this doesn't work very well. Eternal is a nice word to use, but I'm not too fond of happiness. Perhaps something more poetic, e.g. bliss. - 7/10

treeko - The essence of Bach
The subtext describes the violin, which is good. I'm not sure that the violin is the essense of Bach as you stated, but in any case, good choice of words. I would drop the "the" as the main text already has it and the subtext would sound heavy. - 8/10

Kagemucha - strumming the hairs of puppy love
It's an extended metaphor that doesn't work too well >_<. The signature is also quite dreamy, so more elegant words should be chosen in place of "hairs or "puppy love". It also doesn't refer to the violin directly. - 6/10

Pets - let it soothe you
I like this. The phrase follows the maintext nicely (e.g. "The violin - let it soothe you", and soothe is a nice word to use because of the soft th sound. I also like how it relates to the person who would be reading the subtext. - 8/10

Khaled - Forget your worries *fade*
Let the music take you away
This is good . It's poetic and fits with the dreamy feel of the signature. The only thing I would change is the word "take", it's a bland word and bogs down the second line. Perhaps a more poetic word like "sweep" would work better in this case. - 8.5/10

YesItIsh - the tranquil sounds...
Refer to round notes. It's pretty strange to be referring to tranquil sounds when only a violin is included in the signature . Also, it's a little too short, and not very descriptive. Again, I would drop the the (refer to treeko's rating). - 6/10

lackadazed - The Sonorous Symphony
There's only one violin in the signature, and not necessarily a symphony! . Sonorous is a unique word, but I don't think loudness goes with the dreaminess of the signature. I would also drop the "the" (refer to treeko's rating). - 6.5/10

Q77 - Blood-stained Songs *fade* in the Sunset
The fade is unnecessary, it destroys the natural flow of your subtext >_<. Sunset is nice (and fits the signature because of all the reds and oranges), but like WIS I'm not sure where blood-stained comes in. - 7/10

Krycsm - Answering only to the Master's touch
I really like this one . The phrasing is poetic (I especially love the sound of 'touch' at the end of the phrase), and it directly refers to the violin (as in, "The violin - answering only to the Master's touch). It works with the image because the violin is just there, as if it was waiting to be played. - 9.5/10

Blk Mage - The Crimson Melodies of Life
Refer to round notes. Crimson is perhaps too strong and vivid a word. I would, again, drop the "the". Otherwise, the subtext fits, but more reference to the violin is needed. - 7/10

theonlysaneone - Slightly out of tune... *fade* water under the bridge
Your subtext is poetic, but the lines don't really connect with each other (although they are close to each other in length). I think that it could be more poetic and dreamy, as "slightly out of tune" isn't exactly what I'd call either of the two. Nice and subtle reference to the violin. - 7/10

sexysilver - Dreams upon the Clef of Heaven
I'm not sure what "clef" means here (and as a result I do not know if you subtext relates directly to the violin), as the only definition of it which I could find were the Treble, Bass, Alto etc. clefs. I do like the usage of "dreams" and heaven". - 8/10

Forte - Harmonious Dissonance
Lovely choice of words . However, it is a little unclear, as with this it seems like your subtext is actually describing the violin as "harmonious dissonance". - 8/10

francineh - A soothing symphony of sound.
Refer to round notes. Again, there's only one violin in the picture . Soothing is nice, but "symphony of sound" sounds too big and grand and doesn't fit with the mood of the signature. - 7/10



Picks:

Brett618
Kagemucha
YesItIsh
Yoshi4007

I've had a long week/day, and so many subtexts to read through but here it is:



Ryguy - With four simple strings...*fade*...your musical soul can sing
Good job alluding to the violin and creating a nice mood with the second half. Nice alliteration as well.

Yoshi4007 - one note at a time
The music theme is there, but this is quite simple and doesn't describe the sig in its entirety very well.

Pixalation - A serenade of strings
To soothe one's soul
Double-lining this works, it gives it a lyrical feel which, with the words used, makes a pretty good subtext.

Lord_owlstar - The language of music *fade* is universal
I like the message that is being presented, but if it were more descriptive it would be even better. No fade needed.

Brett618 - 'simply symphonic
There's alliteration, but it's a bit too simple for everything that is going on in the sig. You can definitely expand it.

Benladesh - A Melodic Blessing
I think "blessing" connects with the background very nicely, but there is room to write a longer subtext.

Jlt1990 - the notes of eternal happiness...
The "the" could be left out. I like "eternal", but happiness seems a bit too spirited for this sig.

treeko - The essence of Bach
I like how you connected a composer to it, "essence" is a good word to use here.

Kagemucha - strumming the hairs of puppy love
It took a while to make the connection, there needs to be something more about the violin as well.

Pets - let it soothe you
Although what you have works, it feels like there should be another line to this. And then make both more descriptive, too.

Khaled - Forget your worries *fade*
Let the music take you away
Creates a nice ambience, ties in the music/violin with the background well. You could go without the fade, or go for a double-liner.

YesItIsh - the tranquil sounds...
Maybe a different word for "sounds" would work better, I think this could be longer as well.

lackadazed - The Sonorous Symphony
Symphony seems like too big a word to use for this slightly simpler subtext, but sonorous is a good descriptive word.

Q77 - Blood-stained Songs *fade* in the Sunset
Sunset works well with the colors, but blood-stained doesn?t really tie in with the atmosphere of the sig.

Krycsm - Answering only to the Master's touch
I like the different perspective on this. There's an authoritative feel to the sig, yet touch gives it a gentler side as well.

Blk Mage - The Crimson Melodies of Life
Crimson is a bit too strong of a word, and although the idea of the subtext as a whole is nice, it needs to point toward the violin more.

theonlysaneone - Slightly out of tune... *fade* water under the bridge
This might be a little unclear to someone who doesn't know you're referring to the bridge of the violin. But I like the water part, if that makes any sense, although the first part could have a better choice of words.

sexysilver - Dreams upon the Clef of Heaven
This catches the serene musical feel of the sig and I like the imagery, but it could be more focused in on the violin.

Forte - Harmonious Dissonance
Two contrasting words make a nice division between the background and the violin, however for this sig it might be better to describe the violin a bit more.

francineh - A soothing symphony of sound.
Again, not quite a symphony. I think there are other more unique words that would have worked better, although overall it's alright. The alliteration is good.

I choose:
Brett618
Kagemucha
Yoshi4007
YesItIsh

Kagemucha, YesItIsh, Brett618 and Yoshi4007 are eliminated, sorry guys. D:

Round 2



Subtexts are due May 23rd.

3 people will be eliminated this round.

Quote:does he love me?

What a strange pic o.O

But I'm second, which means I won't have the same thing happen to me as last time I was gonna do something similar to Pets', but she had already done it

In any case.... *muses* Heh, I was checking to make sure that was a daisy, and I found the picture you used =P (Although the fact that the girl's name is Daisy should have given it away o.O)

Hmm... nothing about this really stands out. *Is tempted to use 'Lackadaisical' but doesn't* Makes me think of beauty being found in everyday places, innocence (White), short-lived.

Man, I talk a lot. =o *Thinks*

"Tranquil innocence" since the space is pretty tiny. Yup, that's my subtext. No Geico ads this time.

Quote:Resisting temptation *fade* to pluck the petals

'Resisting temptation' would be at the top
*fade*
'to pluck' would be upper left and
'the petals' would be below that.

kkthx

I would just like you to note that the only true acceptable subtext for this is:
I'm half crazy *Fade* All for the love of you
However, that is a song.

So my entry:

Quote:The day's eye *Fade* kissed by the sun

There's so many good possible subtexts for this. Oh, and FYI: The day's eye is making a reference to Chaucer.

Edit: Or Chaucer made reference to the Daisy. I dunno.

Again, just off the top of my head. Will edit if I think of something better:


It's double lined so it can fit in the limited space lengthwise.

By the way, a little known fact about daisies and other sunflowers in general: Each petal and part in the center is a complete flower, with all of the "organs" and everything. In reality, a daisy isn't a flower, but a group of them.