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Round note: I noticed a large pattern of fades. D: I think this round consists of a lot of strong subtexts. It's hard picking 3 to eliminate.

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Ryguy - A twirl. *fade*
A twist.*fade*
A dip. *fade*
And the enchantment commences
This has a resemblance to Krycsm's subtext. With that aside, I do like this subtext.

Pixalation - Spellingbinding steps
Seductive sways
Brownie points for an alliteration? I like how this captures the essence of the sig.

Lord_owlstar - Shades come to life *fade* to spend eternity
I wasn't feeling this subtext too much. I think it could've been the eternity part, I don't think that goes too well with the sig.

Benladesh - Dance *fade* The immortal bond
This seems so-so to me. However, I do see where you were going with this. The words just don't seem right to me.

Jlt1990 - Making things happen *fade* one step at a time...
I don't think this subtext is related to the signature enough, although I see where you're going with the user.

treeko - Tap, Step, Shuffle, Twirl *fade* Dance
I would've liked to see this entire subtext as a fade (ie: Tap *fade* Step *fade* etc), but this also works as well.

Khaled - Twirling to the tempo of life
I like. Hey, how about that? D:

Krycsm - The spell weaved
*Fade*
A step is taken
*Fade*
The dance begins
I like this. I think you could've worked more towards involving Gemma, however.

Blk Mage - The Pastal Playground *fades* Upon the Dance Floor
Pastal's a word? I don't really like this subtext. It doesn't seem to go with the feel of the sig for me.

theonlysaneone - Smoky shadows *fade* dance the night away
I think there would be enough space for there to be no fade on this one. This subtext feels like an obvious one...there's shadow-things dancing. However, better safe than sorry I guess?

sexysilver - The Dark Swan *fade* Seduction to the rhythm of the Night...
I think this is a little too dark-ish for me (and the sig). Although there are shadows, the entire sig itself isn't full of shadows and darkness.

Forte - An endless waltz *fade* of passion
I don't think the fade is necessary. I like the word passion.

francineh - In tune n' In time...

*appears after 1 second just below it and a tch to the right*
Just twirlin' so fine...
I like this, due to it just being catchy. Rawr.

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My Picks: Blk Mage, Jlt1990, Lord_owlstar

PS: Next round I'll start numerical ratings as well, I've been a lazy smoothie.

Round note: I see the signature as more upbeat and happy. Parallel structure = good as it creates a natural rhythm in the subtext which accentuates that feeling, and also creates a feeling of dancing, almost . The magical feeling is a secondary mood you can elaborate on (since dancing can be seen as magic... or something like that)

Ryguy - A twirl. *fade*
A twist.*fade*
A dip. *fade*
And the enchantment commences
I would've placed "A twist" before "A twirl", and I would have changed the last line to "...the enchantment commences" (as your subtext is a little long), but overall I like this. Enchantment relates to magic and is a really good word to use. Parallel structure works nicely here.
8

Pixalation - Spellingbinding steps
Seductive sways
Spellingbinding steps? I think you mean spellbinding? Ignoring that, like I said to ryguy, parallel structure = good. I like spellbinding as it adds to the feel of the signature. IMO, it does feel a little magical because of all the colours blending together on the right . I'm not too fond of seductive sways, but it doesn't bother me much. Double-lining works nicely.
8

Lord_owlstar - Shades come to life *fade* to spend eternity
I really don't think Shades is a nice word to use , as it could also mean sunglasses. Shadows or another word would be better. Also, I feel that a lighter subtext would work better.
7

Benladesh - Dance *fade* The immortal bond
This is a little bland, and doesn't really capture the feel of the signature. Also, a dash or something would help separate the two phrases to make it clear that you are using "the immortal bond" as a definition to "Dance". As of now it's kind of unclear as dance could be a verb.
7

Jlt1990 - Making things happen *fade* one step at a time...
"one step at a time" makes this subtext feel happy; a more upbeat subtext is needed. This doesn't really capture the feel of the signature, either. "Making" isn't the best word to use.
6

EDIT: sorry, I meant heavy, not happy

treeko - Tap, Step, Shuffle, Twirl *fade* Dance
One word verbs are like parallel structure. They add to the upbeat feel of the signature and create a natural rhythm, which is nice. I would add an ellipsis after Twirl though, to separate the two phrases better and give your subtext a more "magical" feel.
7.5

Khaled - Twirling to the tempo of life
The "t" sounds make the subtext a little heavy when a more upbeat subtext is needed. Also, I don't like "life". I agree with WIS, it sounds a little corny and is too deep for the signature. Overall a little bland I'd think =/.
7

Krycsm - The spell weaved
*Fade*
A step is taken
*Fade*
The dance begins
I really like this, it captures the feeling of the signature while making references to magic . The "is" in the second line bothers me a bit; your subtext is SO close to having parallel structure. I really wish you made the first two lines parallel >_<.
8.5

Blk Mage - The Pastal Playground *fades* Upon the Dance Floor
Pastal wasn't a word in the dictionary, so I assume you mean pastel >_<. This subtext is a little unclear - perhaps it would be better if you described the dance floor AS a pastel (?) playground (metaphorically) instead? I'm also not too fond of the words chosen, i.e. playground.
6

theonlysaneone - Smoky shadows *fade* dance the night away
This one's okay. It gives the signature more of a mysterious feel instead of an upbeat feel, but it works in this situation. Nice phrasing on the second line.
7.5

sexysilver - The Dark Swan *fade* Seduction to the rhythm of the Night...
The phrasing is a little awkward, and makes the second phrase a little hard to understand. I'm not fond of 'dark swan'... swans aren't supposed to be dark, even though I know you were referring to the girl's dress (I think). Has a nice rhythm, though.
7

Forte - An endless waltz *fade* of passion
Fade is unneeded I feel. The words you chose are more pensive; I think a more happy subtext would be better. However, you did choose nice words. Still, it's a little dull D=.
7

francineh - In tune n' In time...
*appears after 1 second just below it and a tch to the right*
Just twirlin' so fine...
I like this, but I'm not fond of the " n' ", even if I understand why you did it . The rhyme creates a natural rhythm, which, as I have typed a million times in the last 30 minutes, is good. It's upbeat and happy, and I like the use of the ellipsis.
8

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Dum dee dum:

Blk Mage
Jlt1990
Forte

*bows in apology*

EDIT: graphite stole Post #100 *cries*.

Really sorry about that... T_T Probably as half asleep as ever.

GraphEdit: Heh, I didn't notice it.

Round note: This, at first glance, was a difficult signature to apply a subtext to, but I believe everyone has done a good job trying to convey meanings.

Ryguy - A twirl. *fade*
A twist.*fade*
A dip. *fade*
And the enchantment commences
Other than making this two lines
(eg: A twist *fade* A dip
the enchantment commences) this conveys the magic of dance and gives great feeling to the signature. 9/10

Pixalation - Spellingbinding steps
Seductive sways
I like the imagery this conveys. Well done - 9/10

Lord_owlstar - Shades come to life *fade* to spend eternity
I like the "shades come to life" but the rest of the subtext neither relates to the signature or it's mood 6/10

Benladesh - Dance *fade* The immortal bond
I think a more descriptive subtext would have worked better here 6/10

Jlt1990 - Making things happen *fade* one step at a time...
Thoughtful but a little cliche. - 6.5/10

treeko - Tap, Step, Shuffle, Twirl *fade* Dance
At first this seemed a little staccato but on reflection it imitates the dance of life itself. Well done! - 8/10

Khaled - Twirling to the tempo of life
I love how this not only matches the signature but can relate to the user as well. 9/10

Krycsm - The spell weaved
*Fade*
A step is taken
*Fade*
The dance begins
Love this subtext. It matches all elements and gives an upbeat feeling - see Ryguy's comments re making this two lines. 8/10

Blk Mage - The Pastal Playground *fades* Upon the Dance Floor
A little bit clinical in choice of words but it is counterbalanced by the use of the word pastel = 6/10

theonlysaneone - Smoky shadows *fade* dance the night away
This links well with the muted colours of the background and conveys an almost surreal but effective message
8/10

sexysilver - The Dark Swan *fade* Seduction to the rhythm of the Night... Wow, this took me by surprise. Very evocative and appropriate to the signature - 9/10
(ps: we have black swans in Australia)

Forte - An endless waltz *fade* of passion
This subtext reflects both the movement in the signature and the passion behind the dance - well done. - 8/10

francineh - In tune n' In time...
*appears after 1 second just below it and a tch to the right*
Just twirlin' so fine...
Upbeat and happy, I like this - 8/10

My picks (sorry it was very hard to choose...)

Lord_owlstar
Benladesh
Blk Mage

Blk Mage, Lord_owlstar and Jlt1990 are eliminated. Sorry guys.

(Btw, it wouldn't have mattered if seashell voted anyone).

Round 4



3 people will be eliminated this round.

Subtexts are due June 3rd.

Well that looks oddly familiar.

What......is that?

I was gonna say that =p

I can't tell if its just a bunch of random strokes or an actual drawing.

Oh lord...I'll edit this post once I figure something out

Benladesh Wrote:What......is that?

It's abstract, and up for interpertation.

I'm going to be first. I guess.

Quote:Tell me what you see
*Fade*
Reveal your heart to me
*Fade*
And we will be together